Soyala Amaya

Ok, for my Spanish class actually, we had to write a 'what if' scenario about what would happen if our town suddenly became a military state. Rules: can't escape, and ...

Erm…right. Very, well, surreal. The title fits at least. To reiterate a few points, lose the numbers, and try to keep the idea throughout. You kind of lost me in ...

I kind of have to ask where it's going? WHat's the point? It feels like you started a joke and left it hanging right before the punch line. nice style, ...

*gasp* My first reply on here since Spain! Lordy I want to go back now... Ok, onto critique. You started really well, and caught my attention with the first couple ...

All right, I actually DO write more than poetry, I just didn't thik I had time to scan both forums. I have enough trouble with all the poetry...I've had to ...

Doo be doo be doo...Not quite sure who this about. Betrayal, anger, pain, life sucking in general, a little cliche, but I hope I put some new spins on this. ...

When I first saw the title, I was ready to bust in here and start yelling about 'sin' and how it's overused and just a...ergh, there I go again. I ...

All right, you started out ok, but then you just started rambling into inanities that seemed to have no connection to what you were trying to get across. The finely ...

Um...Deloclya? You do know that Incandesence was being, erm, sarcastic, right? Because frankly, this is one of the most over-done, cliche, hackneyed themes I've ever seen! We're all going to ...

Which brownish dog? THe bigger one under the blanket, or the one with multiple pics? The smaller one, Remmy, is a rottie mix, and the larger one, Herbie, is just ...

I have a LOT of pets..DOgs: KCRoyals.com, Sheba Warrior PRincess, Herbie THe LoveBug, ANd Remmy Dean Martin THe First Christiansen. Cat:LIttle DOg. TUrtle: SPeedy VOn Speedster T3h Scaled One. Guinea ...

*Gasp* Puppies and kitties, oh my! Yay! well... if I can't get any comments on how I look in the post your pic thread, I'm pretty sure my animals are ...

All right...all more puppy pics...even if they are so killerly cute that I can't stand it! I love them all! Instead, here's the cam whore having fun with the camera ...

In response to the hopeless plug left in my message box, yes, I do critique stories, I just haven't been doing it on this site because I'm having so much ...

Much much better. And yes, sober, un-high writing is usually better than whhen one is drunk and rocketing to the moon in their underpants. I'm a little lost in the ...